Date: 24th june 2019
LI: To use paragraphs
Last weekend i went to my dads house and we had to drive 5 to 6 hours to get there. I love seeing my dad, but it takes ages.
So in the weekend we did not do much. We arrived on the thursday night so i missed friday of school! We got to my dads house at midnight so i went straight to bed and dad was sleeping and did not wake up. In the morning my mum came and got me because dad had to go to work at 4.30 in the morning because it was a friday. So we went of and got some money and took it home because we where taking dad out for dinner. I got chicken tenders and curly fries and the drink i got is a raspberry float if you don't know what a float is it is ice cream soda.
The next day i went to my grandads house and that is right next to my cousins school. I looked to see if i could see them and i saw mitchell and he was singing a maori song it was so cute.
At there lunch time break we saw both of them and they where so excited to see us. Tate said " i have not seen you in ages.
I LOVE THEM SO MUCH
Hey Tarli
ReplyDeleteI loved your post so much. I think you could make your I's uppercase and proofread. I love how you used paragraphs and you put in a lot detail. I hope you have a good rest of your day.
Bye
Maiya
Hi tarli,
ReplyDeleteI really loved your post there were heaps of detail and kindness but what could of made it better was a picture of you and your dad otherwise your post was the best I had seen today.
Kind regards Amelie.f